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Welcome
May 15, 2008 10:47:31 GMT -5
Post by Kellen Lynch on May 15, 2008 10:47:31 GMT -5
I'll get around to posting rules sometime later today, but for now I'd like to say welcome to all users and encourage everyone to post their thoughts on the story so far (both plotwise, stylistic issues, etc.). Thanks and happy reading!
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Welcome
May 15, 2008 13:53:53 GMT -5
Post by brooksy on May 15, 2008 13:53:53 GMT -5
Just finished Chapter one. I would like to start by saying WOW. I am a person that hates to read. I don't throw the word "hate" around very much, but I do hate reading. In class growing up I would find any way out of reading that I could. This however was different. I thought I would just start reading the first few lines of the prologue and see what happened. But I was hooked. I hung on every word and couldn't believe how much I was connecting with the characters. The ending of this chapter was the best part. It gave me enough but left me wanting more. Like I said I don't read very much at all so I can't comment on any technical aspects of the story but I know what I liked and I very much enjoyed this story so far. Can't wait to find out what happens in the rest of the book.
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Welcome
May 15, 2008 18:54:01 GMT -5
Post by Kellen Lynch on May 15, 2008 18:54:01 GMT -5
If you thought that this left you hooked, I could send you an edited copy of the first chapter. I feel it is much more suspenseful, but that is just me *as I've been the only one to see it*
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Post by professorken on Jan 1, 2009 8:57:19 GMT -5
The online book is worth attempting in one sitting. Granted, that version needs a little editing, which is very easily fixed, but the story had me transfixed for quite a bit. Here's the big question: How do you continue impressing the readers? What's next?
If I can offer any criticism, I think the pacing could use some work in areas where large moments of time seem to pass between characters, and less often, during dialogue. The action sequences are top notch. I, on the other hand, have trouble writing sudden action and come across as overly leasurely when faced with everything else. I'm working with a writer right now who can't piece a good setting together to save his life. That's why we teamed up. Just in case you're wondering, no we don't have a publisher either. The web works for now.
Great Job. Wow.
if you want to write me a note, put my username next to "@gmail.com"
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Welcome
Jan 2, 2009 15:02:55 GMT -5
Post by Kellen Lynch on Jan 2, 2009 15:02:55 GMT -5
I think you're absolutely right about pacing, and that's something I try to work on with each new version of the story. What's next: well, that would be tellling now wouldn't it? Thanks for the complements ;D about the action sequences. Yeah, trying to get published is hard work. I recommend the Writer's Market book (I think it's online, too) and just shotgunning it out to as many people in your intended market as possible. Then again, it hasn't worked for me yet, so we'll see how that goes.
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